I am a student from HCT who is going to write about the college way which I really disagree with it. In this essay I will write about stuff which I don’t like about my college which really make me feel like I am a child.HCT which is Higher College of Technology, I have been a student in this college for almost 2 years and right now I am in common year taking my final exams. My college is best in several way but there are some stuff which I don’t like about HCT. First of all, the college treat us like children. How? Absents, they just want the student to come to the college like in high school, come on now we all know what best for us and what the use of making it hard on us because some of us is not sponsored and they study at morning and afterwards they work till midnight and they don’t even get a chance to be with their family. Even though they are good with their marks but still college want them to come because it’s there policy and they don’t care if the guy have to divorce his wife for being busy not having time for her. Yet another thing which I don’t like about HCT is method of teaching, keeping teachers in a chain and not letting them teach the student in a free way. Following orders from someone who don’t know anything about the student while if the teacher was free to choose the method which she want then I guarantee that less student will fail because teachers know exactly what level is each student. One more thing is that the class rooms. It has less safety and if any one of them got in fire the all class will be in danger and even dead can be happen. Just spending lots of money for building those caravans while they can built class’s with that money which will be more safety and cooler.
I am not complaining while everything was provided free for locals student. Just giving my opinion about the college way and I am not a expert just want to say even I know nothing will change and everything will be same.
You have some good points! If you make two simple changes, your opinion will be much more effective. I'll discuss those changes, then respond to what you say.
ReplyDeleteTo carry your message more effectively, first break your writing into paragraphs. You have three points, so five paragraphs would be appropriate. Then double-check that your sentences are short and simple. For example, look at what comes after your first point. "How?" is very effective. The run-on sentence that follows is not effective at all.
As far as content goes, you raise three interesting points: how the college treats students, the method of teaching, and the buildings. I think I understand the first and last points, but I do not catch your meaning about the second point. I'd be happy to discuss what you mean about that. Would you prefer a creative-writing approach instead of the emphasis we now have on academic skills?